I'm glad you weren't offended by my mention of the beginning - I really did enjoy the story a lot and so am happy that didn't overshadow the comment. I think I found it a little confusing that Dean knew of Sam and was looking for Sam but didn't know Sam - I was really trying to figure that all out and it distracted me. Also the prat with picking up the girl, only she was cover, and it was Sam he wanted, but it wasn't. Just a little extra convolution and confusion. By the tie they get hot and heavy the first time, I was cool and grooving along with the story. Maybe having the part about Sam being Bobby's foster son closer up front, so we knew what was going on a bit - then we could just focus on Dean tracking Sam and how the lure worked, etc. YMMV, of course :-)
I bookmarked your master list :-D you'll probably see my name pop up again!
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I'm glad you weren't offended by my mention of the beginning - I really did enjoy the story a lot and so am happy that didn't overshadow the comment. I think I found it a little confusing that Dean knew of Sam and was looking for Sam but didn't know Sam - I was really trying to figure that all out and it distracted me. Also the prat with picking up the girl, only she was cover, and it was Sam he wanted, but it wasn't. Just a little extra convolution and confusion. By the tie they get hot and heavy the first time, I was cool and grooving along with the story. Maybe having the part about Sam being Bobby's foster son closer up front, so we knew what was going on a bit - then we could just focus on Dean tracking Sam and how the lure worked, etc. YMMV, of course :-)
I bookmarked your master list :-D you'll probably see my name pop up again!